Saturday, May 19, 2012

Love, Heartbreak but Freedom

Then,
I loved you; I never let go of you
You loved me, yet you had your own dues.
I clung to you; the parasite, which feed on you
You suffocated, asked for freedom from this servitude.
I, the sanguine, promised this would work, stayed resolute
You, the defeated continued to stay put.
I, relieved; in the fairy world I continued
You for my happiness, tagged alone no clue.
I, all along choose to ignore your woes
You, all along developed a hatred, deep root.

Today,
I realize too late, how wrong set were my views
For the naive and romantic me, only always knew.
How love was over caste, how love was over religion, how love was over the almighty above
How love was unconditional, a feeling too delicate, a feeling so painfully true.
I, 'now the selfish?', have steps to turn back to
To grant you the freedom, you endlessly pursued.
The path now for me, has been bedecked ahead
With traces of wilderness and abundance of solitude.
The heart takes a beat as it dejectedly concludes
But the conscience is what sighs and is finally rescued.

PS: I wrote the poem at 2 last night and posted it. Today morning, I felt how silly it was, and it was just the lack of sleep and a mind filled with unnerving thoughts which bought out those words, so I deleted it. Thank you Saru, because you felt it was worth posting, so now I repost it.

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  1. Story of my life that ..

    thats all i will say I know the feeling ...


    Bikram's

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    1. If it was not meant to be ours, we have to let go. Coming out from that, is an uphill task, dreaded. Thanks for your comment Bikram.

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  2. Well! :) What can I say...It's a well written poem and why would you delete...Cheers to Saru.

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    1. Nice to see you here :-) Deleted, because I felt too silly after I wrote it. Thank you for your comment Chintan.

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  3. I'm glad you reposted it!! The best things we write is when it is either very late or we are too tired- because then our mental defenses are down and we really are able to be transparent in our words. They become powerful!

    This is amazing!

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    1. Well said Connie, mental defenses. Couldn't agree more. I can rightly say, I wrote what I felt at that moment of time and right away published it. Thank you for your comment Connie.

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  4. I am guessing that is way most of us feel.. very well penned J... and you DELETED it.. really?????

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    1. Nice to see you here Suku. Well at some point yes, I do feel, I have not let gone of some people and have clung to them. Deleted yes :-) Felt a tad bit silly.

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  5. I think that's absolutely touching. Love is a hard feeling to define but something that we all have in commun.

    xoxo

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    1. Thank you for visiting Dandy-Doll. Love indeed is an emotion too deep and intense but strangely has touched all.

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  6. I feel experimenting is good..:) I don't know much about poetry thing, but this is good re. I also try to experiment with poetry blogs, it's fun I feel...:)

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    1. Well I certainly didnot write for fun or experimentation at that moment of time, but I get what you say. Vareity is the spice of the blog and it surely is fun :-) Thanks for the comment Prashanth.

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  7. Nice poem Jenny....Personal space is so very important in a relationship.

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    1. A very thin line, between possessing something and loving someone. Couldn't agree more. Thanks for your comment.

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  8. Very impressive writing, Jenny:)

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    1. Thank you Rahulji. I hope I can keep it the same :-)

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  9. Nicely written...glad u posted it. :)

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    1. Thank you Ria. Now, I too am glad I posted it :-)

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  10. I lack the ability to write poetic verses...but I guess it is all about instant outpourings...one cant think and write a poem...I loved it.

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    1. True, its all in the moment. Fortunately for me, it didnot turn up as silly, as I thought it was. Thank you for the comment Alka.

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  11. The moment of truth when you realize that letting go, is the deepest form of love.

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    1. And the most painful of all. Thank you for your comment Purba.

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  12. It is sweet and very honest - thanks for sharing! Hope you are having a wonderful day!
    -Jyoti
    Style-Delights Blog

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    1. Thank you for liking it Jyothi.

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  13. Hmmm the line "Best comes out of the artist when he is disturbed" has proven write again!
    this is awesome! what made you think its silly!!! the "Then" lines are so very touching shows innocent side and unwillingness on the otherside! I am touched!!!

    Pls pls pls dare not delete anything u write u are blessed writer.
    Keep writing and keep posting :D Jenny

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    1. :-) I too love the 'Then' lines Ramya. Naive innocent, living in our own sweet world.

      But fairy tales are shortlived, the 'Now' will happen today or tomorrow.

      Thank you, your comments are so sweet and motivating :-) Awaiting an update on your post!!

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  14. This is amazing Jenny !
    this is all so true....
    I can so relate to it...
    feels like I've lived it..

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    1. Nice to see you here Aditi. And I hope you are doing better now! Your latest post has a lot of positivity which is reassuring :-)

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  15. I'm always impressed by people who can communicate through poetry...the succinct shorter form never yielded to me!

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    1. Thank you Deepathy for those kind words. Glad I made some sense there!

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  16. You won't believe it. I have saved that notification in my mail and was reading the poem again. I clicked it by mistake and landed here. And, voila! you have posted it. But why didn't I get the notification? Anyways, it is such a brilliant poem. Don't thank me and 'worth posting'...It is much more than that...I guess I am one lucky person who is surrounded by all the wonderful writers...

    Also, post poems more often and create a separate tab for it...:)

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    1. Thank you for the kind words Saru. But honestly now I feel the poem is nice after reading all your comments. I guess that is why the comments are important sometimes :-)

      Ahh, if I can write well consistently I will surely try and make a separate tab for it!

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  17. Hey thank you for stopping by. :) Keep writing you.

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    1. :-) Sure I will! Thanks for visiting :-)

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  18. Nice poem Jenny, i used to write poetry as a kid but gave it up... here's one I did write some years ago, though : http://e-pinion.blogspot.in/2006/06/dear-god.html

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    1. Thank you. I will go through this link. Thanks for sharing.

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  19. Also, thanks for a nice review :) I have enabled the followers widget on my blog's homepage e-pinion.blogspot.com ... Is there a way to do it on each post, separately? If yes, do let me know how....

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    1. The follow widget is applicable for your entire blog. You need not do it for each post. And you are welcome :-)

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  20. I love your choice of words :) Lovely piece of writing.
    You have a really nice blog. I'm sure to visit again :)

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    1. Hello and welcome. Thank you for the comment. I am glad you liked my page. looking forward to your visits :-)

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  21. I've installed the follow widget.... Check it out :)

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  22. It made me cry,, really,,,a touching one i had ever read,,

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    1. Thank you so much for your heartfelt comment Ruchi!

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  23. Not everything is fair in Life and in Love. It needs a lot of effort from both the sides. Wonderfully written Jenny, I could feel the emotions attached to every word. really nice. and Thank you Saru for asking her to re post it. This is absolutely Brilliant Jenny

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    1. Agree, nothing is fair in love and life. Thank you so much for liking the poem so much Ashwini, and yes now I do feel, it is a decent enough poem :-)

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  24. Amazing !! Speachless ..
    Increadible thoughts and words .. every word on this poem seems brilliently picked up !!

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  25. Thank you Chaitanya for your motivating comment! This is very sweet

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  26. Nice poem yaar. I still cannot believe you thought of deleting it. And glad Saru read it before deleting!

    My blogging friends are slowly becoming poetic! Wonder that's the new wave in blogging? What say Jenny?

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    1. :-) Thank you Binu. Poetic or not, but this was more out of frustation at that moment of time!

      But if its the new wave, I would love to surf over it :-)

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